| 2007-04-23 15:05:53 |
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| Not bad, but you need to proffread before posting, or better still have someone other then you do it. 2 sets of eyes are better then 1. |
drabt0e |
| 2007-05-02 15:44:11 |
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| and what about you hypocrite? proofread* than* jeez all this bad spelling would kill an english teacher |
Anonymous |
| 2007-07-05 08:07:41 |
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| Not only would the spelling kill an English teacher, but the sentance structure as well. For starters, you never start a sentance with the word AND. The word 'English' should always be capitalized, and the word 'proof read' is two words, not one. HA! Who's the hypocrite now? It's a sex story meant to make you horny, you still got the jist of what happened didn't you? Lay off the poor bastard! P.S. The word is spelled Fetish not Fetisish! |
English 69 |
| 2007-08-25 18:50:26 |
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For gosh sakes, guys...chill out...! It's only a freakin fantasy...
By the way, English is only capitalized when used as a proper noun...ok...? |
Titanium |
| 2007-11-22 08:39:29 |
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Oh wow....
"sentance" structure????! Just give up already. But I agree, it is just meant to be a fantasy. Not particularly erudite stuff.
By the way, I'm pretty sure "English" is always capitalized. |
Anonymous |
| 2007-12-22 14:40:51 |
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| firstly.. there is nothing wrong with starting a sentance with the word 'and': grammatically its completely correct and anyone should feel free to do so. English is always capitalised... its a nounal adjective in this sense but still needs to be capitalised and ffs you're on about a story including a fifty year old man fucking an 18 year old girl... and you're on about spelling and grammar... yeah. because that's logical. |
Anonymous |
| 2007-12-22 23:11:38 |
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| u guys are gay who cares |
cock |
| 2008-01-14 12:27:39 |
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| It's sentence btw... not sentance |
Beauty |
| 2008-04-03 21:25:24 |
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| Dont worry baby i think they all are hater from what i have red the story was perfect i would love for a man to fuck me all night all week |
Nikita |
| 2008-04-05 11:19:02 |
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| U people are all weirdos for commenting about grammar. But yeah-yeah all of u are right- next time, after reading the story, just get out and masturbate or ya know, something else...just commenting on this proves u people have no life...and fetisish is supposed to e cute...not realy meant as "fetish" |
PlayingwithaDildo |
| 2008-07-20 02:17:03 |
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| could hav had a bit more detail... |
sexie alexie |
| 2008-07-29 08:09:30 |
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| it really rushed into it two quick there was no story line |
admj |
| 2008-08-09 15:40:56 |
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| It sucked. It didn't describe anything really. |
. |
| 2008-08-28 06:00:14 |
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| seriously? all you losers can do is sit here and talk about what's right and wrong about the english language?? get a f u c k i n g life!! |
fuckers |
| 2008-11-15 00:24:22 |
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| I think it read as a real experience and not a made up story. It needs more detail. Tell us things like. How an eighteen year old vulva looks smells and tastes |
Stormy Tounge |
| 2009-03-20 08:46:42 |
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| i wanked ova this |
jt |
| 2009-08-15 11:55:06 |
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| U GUYS ALL SUCK AT SPELLING |
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